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Writing 101: Serially Lost

This post was written in response to Writing 101: Serially Lost. As of now, this is a stand alone; however, I am trying to come up with two more parts to complete this short tale.

 

 

“I lost it. I can’t believe I lost it. Wolf is gonna bury me when he finds out.” The mousey haired boy chewed on what was left of his nails as he paced. “I’m gonna be underground. I’ll be so far I’ll never get out.”

The creak of a door seemed to underline the boy’s last few words. The boy jumped and started chewing faster.

“Relax Mouse. It’s just me.” An older version of the boy stood by the door. “Wolf sent me to check on you.”

Mouse’s eyes went wide and his breathing picked up. “N-n-n-nothing’s wrong. I’m f-f-f-fine.”

The older boy rolled his eyes. “Tell me another story. Maybe I’ll live that one.”

Mouse shook his head.

“If you don’t tell me, I’ll send Wolf up here. He’ll get it outta you.”

Mouse’s skin turned several shades whiter. “He’ll bury me. I lost it.”

“You’ll have to speak louder than that if you don’t want Wolf here.”

Mouse glared at his brother. “I said I lost it. Wolf will bury me when he finds out.”

“What did you lose that would send you underground? You know Wolf don’t care about most things.”

“He cares about this. I lost his knife. He gave it to me and I lost it. I needed to keep it safe.” Mouse put his hand back up to his mouth and resumed his chewing. “He’s gonna bury me.”

“He ain’t gonna bury you. If he was he woulda done it years ago the first time you lost something.” The older boy placed a hand on Mouse’s shoulder. “Now come on. We gotta tell Wolf before he finds out by himself.”

Mouse swallowed hard but followed his brother out of the room.

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The AP Roberts is an extremely rare creature and there is only one known AP Roberts in the world. Usually off in its own little world, the AP returns to reality when it gets lonely. This elusive creature is rather difficult to catch on film, however will pose for drawings. The AP, though wild by nature, can be tamed and makes a wonderful pet. It should also be known that while the AP gets along with most creatures it has an intense fear of insects and large canines. The AP lives on a diet of mainly vegetables and candy but is not known to refuse food that is made and offered through kindness. The drink of choice for the AP is tea though it is known to drink water and juice. There is still much to be learned of the AP however, most agree that the writings of the AP are truly something to behold. Hopefully, one day the AP will find a good Agent creature who will introduce the AP's writings to a good publisher creature and the world will be able to read the AP's works.

13 thoughts on “Writing 101: Serially Lost

  1. I think there needs to be some reason that a) Mouse keeps losing things, and b) the knife is more than just a knife. I agree with Quattrohands that you should choose the more interesting possibilities over the most obvious.

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