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Magic

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Round about the pond
Puddles always near
Sit on little stumps
Noises do I hear
Birds go flying by
Resting in the green
Bits of colour all around
There’s magic to be seen

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The AP Roberts is an extremely rare creature and there is only one known AP Roberts in the world. Usually off in its own little world, the AP returns to reality when it gets lonely. This elusive creature is rather difficult to catch on film, however will pose for drawings. The AP, though wild by nature, can be tamed and makes a wonderful pet. It should also be known that while the AP gets along with most creatures it has an intense fear of insects and large canines. The AP lives on a diet of mainly vegetables and candy but is not known to refuse food that is made and offered through kindness. The drink of choice for the AP is tea though it is known to drink water and juice. There is still much to be learned of the AP however, most agree that the writings of the AP are truly something to behold. Hopefully, one day the AP will find a good Agent creature who will introduce the AP's writings to a good publisher creature and the world will be able to read the AP's works.

2 thoughts on “Magic”

  1. Very nice, only you force the grammar in “Noises do I hear” to fit your rhyme, and you need to lose a syllable in “bits of colour all around.” But, like I said, very nice. If you clear those two issues, I believe you could get this published.

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    1. Thank you so much for your kind words. I will admit that I’ve tried to fix the last two lines to omit the extra syllables without any luck. Every attempt I’ve made seems out-of-place and awkward when combined with the rest of the poem.

      The strange grammar was done on purpose though I admit it could have been done better. I was attempting to evoke a childlike wonder where things are happening around you rather than to you. Like I said, it could have been done better and the next time I go through this poem I will probably fix it.

      Again, thank you very much for your comment. I always appreciate your thoughts and insight into the confusing world of grammar. 🙂

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